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Standing in the center of a huge crowd
The Dragon has never been more alone
These people look up to her, admire her
But not one understands the lone Dragon

On the inside, Dragon is struggling -
Even the very strongest will fall down
Sometimes even the bravest need to cry
No one is utterly unbreakable

She is the leader of these animals
At the top, she just has farther to fall
And she has no equal to steady her
To keep her from falling or breaking down

The problem with leadership is simple:
The poor Dragon has no one to follow
When she is hurting, lost or frightened
(Deep down, she's as scared as ev'ryone else)

The others follow her, depend on her
They trust her - how can she let them all down
The Dragon struggles with herself as well
Her pride won't let her admit she can't cope

She bravely decides to just keep going
And helps her followers when they need it
But the one who most needs a helping hand
Before her wings fail...
                                   is Dragon herself.
And my muse has gone back to dark and scary...

After some Googling of typical Dragon traits, I came up with this - incorporating softheartedness with leadership and pride. The Dragon is also considered the leader of the Zodiac animals.

Disclaimer-type-thing: This is not a self-reference/self-insert, regardless of my dA nickname

This deviates from my usual poems (haikus). It's supposed to have 10 syllables per line, four lines per stanza.

Preview Image is here -> iridescentdragoness.deviantart…

Critique is always welcome - I'm not much of a poet, but I'd like to get better!
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PerspectiveZero Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Artist
I could think of this as being a sorrowful choral (SATB arrangment) madrigal, probably written in respect to a Melodic Minor key.
IridescentDragoness Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ooh, yes! This could definitely be a haunting-sounding, slow song. Having multiple voice ranges would help with that, I think.

I don't speak Music... But I think I got the general gist... OTL
PerspectiveZero Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Student Artist
Sorry, sometimes I just say things not thinking if people understand me or not... and yes, you did get the idea. Madrigal just means a complex piece with multiple voices; In this case definitely an arrangement for Soprano, Alto, Tenor and Bass, perhaps with an electric organ (plain and gloomy), or just the voices... Still, cool poem.
IridescentDragoness Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No worries, I tend to do the same thing.

That makes sense, then. :)
PerspectiveZero Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Student Artist
I am glad to hear I am not the only one :)
Valkeus Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You've chosen a wonderfully subtle form for this poem. Blank verse allows you so much freedom with the sentence structure and the actual content. This poem almost reads like prose or natural speech. Too many new poets try too hard to rhyme and come up with stuff like "I think that everyone can clearly see/To be a dragon is so hard for me."

I think it would take a more experienced poet than me to suggest any changes. (Well, I think you could take the apostrophe out of "everyone", since it's usually said with just 3 syllables... but that's just nitpicking.) Your description of the loneliness of leadership is very mature and observant and made me think. Best of luck in the contest.
IridescentDragoness Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I've never really been able to rhyme anyway, so I guess I don't have to worry about that. :shrug: Although if my English teacher makes us rhyme this year, I'm gonna be in trouble...

I think I'll leave the apostrophe in for now (I need the word abbreviated so it keeps with the syllable count) unless I can think of some way to reword that line better.
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